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Broken

Her smile once illuminated her eyes,
Like a pair of glowing fireflies,
Dancing a private, exotic dance.
But now, her eyes have dulled,
They've lost the illustrious glow
Of life they once held.
She only smiles for the sake of hiding
Her brokenness and insecurities.
I cannot help, but notice that
Her smile does not reach her eyes
Like it once did.
©2004-2009 *cholie
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A more recent piece of mine that I wrote on Friday, July 11, 2003.

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:iconakua:
this is very good. I really like how you have emotion in your words.

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:) Thank you for your comment!

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:iconcadence92:
i like this....i like how it shows how shes changed, how her smile no longer sits high on her face...

nice use of language and imagry....i like

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not alot right now makes sence to me
and i wont go quietly
gonna chase my dreams and catch up to them

~~I've always been strong, but cant make this happen~~

--wheres life taking me?--
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Thank you so much for taking time to read and comment on my poetry! You rock! :nod:

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:iconbladeace:
nice

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My enemies are without Honor. I bring them only Vengeance.. and Death.
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This piece actually provoked a thought string too long to post here--needless to say I identified with this piece :) Good work! :)

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Desire begins in the mind.
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Thank you! Do you mind what sharing what thoughts it provoked? I'm glad that the poem was able to get you thinking. :) Thanks for taking time to read and comment on my work! :D

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