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Moonface

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Moonface

August 29, 2016

she-
with a moonface
innumerable speckles across her countenance
like tiny henna constellations
bountiful scars scattered about her skin
like a patchwork of trenches and craters

she-
with flawed pulchritude
yet, like the moon with her damaged landscape
is still considered beauteous and comely
and so is she-
with the moon for her face
radiant and resplendent

(even though her aesthetics are atypical,
she is perfectly stunning to me)
A little poem that came to mind yesterday while I was thinking of beauty in regards to societal standards and the moon and how it is considered beautiful even though its landscape isn't impeccable and it doesn't have its own light source. Why can't this be applied to people? For there to be successful leaders, there needs to be people who support and encourage them along the way.

(This was partially inspired by an excerpt of a novel I read sometime ago...wherein the author compared her countenance to the moon. Alas, I have forgotten the author and the title of the novel she wrote!)

Society stresses and focuses way too much on perfection.
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Alto--Ego's avatar
Coming at you long overdue from :iconprojectcomment: let's see what we've got here-

You've brought before us a rather resplendent poem drawing a reflective comparison between a  woman's scarred face and the beauty of the moon, as yes, as you say the moon's surface is indeed scarred, pockmarked with craters, impacts from space debris with vast dark seas of frozen stone- How it only reflects the light of the sun rather than having any radiance of it's own- a rather apt analogy you've drawn, and quite the creative one as well. Your vocabulary is well developed and you've exercised it to great avail in this piece, however, the only thing I can point out would be the lack of capitalization and some inconsistent punctuation. Other than that your verses are rather well-worded and you illustrate a clear image through your choice of terms, putting forth a clear message that is neither preachy nor cheesy- rather, a rather cunning observation, which although inspired by the excerpt of a novel, was still woven in such a way that it retains a clear sense of voice and originality. You've also brought to light a good deal of irony, in where yes, society places a good deal of stress on perfection, while many still find the moon, a cratered, damaged hunk of rock in orbit above earth to be beautiful. It was something that even I hadn't thought about until I read this work, but it serves to point out this otherwise veiled dissonance. Many-a-cheers to you!